Down, Dark, Deep

Down, dark, deep
below earth’s light,
live creatures unseen
by our innocent eyes.

They’re inhuman,
obscene and incredibly
shrewd to the ways
of cruelty and anguished pain.

Their eyes squint with
an otherworldly gleam,
flashing with a thrill
to hurt and maim.

Lips curled in merciless
glee, they intone mantras
of depravity.  From chasms
beneath, they wander alone,
banished from existence forevermore.

In limbo they’re sentenced,
no victims they claim;
the hell that they know
is marked with their names.

Over at Imaginary Garden With Real Toads, Fireblossom, for Fireblossom Friday,  invites us to write on devils.  This is a re-post with a minor change.  http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2012/07/fireblossom-friday-devil-you-say.html

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  1. Excellent flow! I really liked this.

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  2. I like this part best:
    “Lips curled in merciless
    glee, they intone mantras
    of depravity”

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  3. A wonderfully sinister write…..! Good post.

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  4. I love that after you describe their evil so intensely, you assure us that they are already in limbo and dis empowered. “marked by their names” !!

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  5. A very spooky write, and I especially like the final stanza. Well done!

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  6. I would hate to have to live that way…yikes. You captured their miserable existence so well.

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  7. Love this, Gayle… especially the last two stanzas.

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  8. dang…a rather chilling end on this one….def no thte way i want to live…

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  9. Yeah, a chilling thought..living forever in limbo…

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  10. Yikes! Very eerie! I love the rhythm you used in this one!

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  11. The wickedness and also a sense of empty isolation is strong in this. Thanks so much for being a part of FBF! Just one note for future reference; a new poem was asked for in the instructions, as is the case with all the challenges at Toads except for open link monday.

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    • Thank you, Coalblack…I appreciate the great comment. So sorry that I missed the proper instructions for your challenge. Only re-posts on open link Monday…got it. 🙂

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  12. OOOoooohhh, I like the last stanza the best, too! But it’s all well done. 🙂 You described them so well, I can almost hear them wailing!

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  13. This is otherworldly and really good…

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  14. Pacing is excellent and lends verisimilitude to the piece. One ends up really feeling that promise of hell. Excellent work.

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  15. Dark and deep … powerful.

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  16. Androgoth

     /  August 17, 2012

    Yes I remember this one Gayle
    and it is really good too 🙂 You have
    been etremely busy with your post
    and I will need to be calling back at
    the weekend to catch up a little 🙂

    In the meantime do have a wonderful evening
    and a superb weekend my great friend 🙂 🙂

    Androgoth XXx

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    • Hi there…yes, I rather like this one myself. 🙂 Will be happy to see you whenever you can come by, Androgoth…have a fun rest-of-your-weekend. I went out last night…in tonight… Take care… xoxo

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