Feeling Bliss

Feeling           bliss            this            time               would          come

Bliss             arrived         when             I                       did                   see

This          when          awakened       shall                 I                       feel                   

Time           I                    shall                   be                    ever                  free      

Would          did              I                    ever                  feel                   today                

Come               see              feel               free                  today                always


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Today,  Semaphore (Sam) shows us the clever Square Poem at FormForAll with an example by Lewis Carroll: http://dversepoets.com/2012/06/28/form-for-all-square-poems/

Mine reads both horizontally and in columns…well it’s supposed to make sense if you do it this way!  It hurt my brain but it was fun.

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  1. Nice one, Bodhirose. Inviting: feel free today and always.

    I am still thinking of how best to tackle this puzzling form. 🙂

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    • Well thanks…it sure was a brain twister. I sometimes feel that the Linky doesn’t stay open long enough for some of these forms… But good luck with coming up with something…I’ll come by and check.

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  2. it’s interesting how you want to be free, but the words seem trapped in the form, and you want to escape this form, and go back to your own freeform…it’s cool how you can bring that across. it was very hard to write!!

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  3. Definitely makes it easier to read as a square poem when you space it that way. When I wrote mine, I used Excel spreadsheets… I’m pretty sure Microsoft didn’t expect that piece of software to be used for poetry!

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  4. Definitely easier to read as a square poem when you space it like that! These are the first types of poems where I used an Excel spreadsheet for composing… I’m pretty sure poetry wasn’t quite what they had in mind when they put that software together!

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  5. Hmmm… my comment disappeared…. testing…

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    • Sorry, Sam..for some reason all of your comments went straight into my spam folder! You’re so right..an excel spreadsheet would have worked better for the spacing. Thanks for coming by.

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  6. nice…you worked it well to form…and this works rather like a riddle within your words as well…bliss cam when i saw, i felt, if only and then the invitation….very cool piece ma’am

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    • Well, it was tricky to get the wording to all make sense. It was a fun challenge..if not a little nerve wracking! Thanks, Brian.

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  7. Yes (agreeing with Brian), very lovely – hope to get to that blissful state! k.

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  8. nice…always good if a little bliss comes our way…and may it in the form of a square poem..nice..and agreeing with bri as well

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  9. Outstanding!

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  10. hobgoblin2011

     /  June 29, 2012

    Nice job with the form. Excellent poetry while adhering to the Square poem’s parameters. Really a great job here. Thanks

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  11. Fascinating and very cleverly thought out, Gayle. I’d never heard of this form ~ but you work it well! 🙂

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    • Thanks a lot, Jacqueline. I hadn’t heard of it before myself until introduced to it over at dVerse. It was a tough one..

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  12. Hiya,
    this was so well done, that I did hurt my brain for you and turned it into an image: this shows the down lines more clearly. Take a look and feel free to use if it suits you.
    I hope the link works as there is no preview in wordpress I can’t test it.

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    • Hi Aprille..well I didn’t see a link here but when I click on your name up comes the image. Well thanks so much for hurting your brain for me…it’s much clearer on your image! That was very generous of you and thanks for the great compliment too.

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  13. If I feel free, its bliss ~ Thanks for the words and form ~

    http://everydayamazin.blogspot.ca/2012/06/walk.html

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  14. rosemary mint

     /  June 29, 2012

    “did I ever feel today”

    Great line.

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  15. Liked the poem and others’ comments too. Always helpful. There is always longing to be free when confined. It grows into and out of the form so naturally. Well done!

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  16. Your creative genius just keeps growing and astounding me. I never saw such a form of poetry. Amazing!

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    • There’s that word again…genius..no, not nearly..but I sure appreciate it when people enjoy my writing. Thanks, Lorna…you’re a sweetheart. I never saw such a form before either…there seems to be endless forms and new ones are being invented all the time.

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  17. Excellent job with that form!

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  18. Big props for pulling this off! I don’t like the form (nothing against you) but I love the words and the message! 😉

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    • Thanks, Corina..I doubt that I’ll ever do another. Certainly not a favorite form but I had to give it a try!

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  19. Interesting form which you handled very well, Gayle.

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