O open-hearted Kindness, reigning peace
Your model of piousness brings me peace
Sacred sweetness emanates, giving freely
Like honey-amber richness, flowing peace
What path may bring you near, I do not mind
Searching, my alertness finds your peace
Your grace shines forth in joyful, loving glory
Mending my brokenness through your peace
Elevated calm permeates my soul
When bathed in happiness by your peace
I beseech thee, O My Beloved Loving One
Surround me in completeness to know peace
May it always be thus between us two
A connectedness, entwining the Rose to peace
Check out tonight’s guidance by Samuel over at dVerse Poets to learn the art of the Ghazal form at our Form-For-All: http://dversepoets.com/2013/01/31/formforall-ghazal-sonnet/
Mary
/ January 31, 2013I liked this a lot. So very caring / loving. What a wonderful connection you expressed in this poem!
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Bodhirose
/ January 31, 2013Thanks so much, Mary…kindness is very powerful in its quiet giving.
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Laurie Kolp
/ January 31, 2013Peace a connection flowing is divine… loved this!
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Bodhirose
/ January 31, 2013Yes, a divine connection to one and all…thank you, Laurie.
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brian miller
/ January 31, 2013Your grace shines forth in joyful, loving glory
Mending my brokenness through your peace
nice…love that couplet…the caring for one another and bringing new life to each other….really this is a lovely ghazal…
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Bodhirose
/ January 31, 2013Kindness can heal can’t it. Thanks for the nice compliment.
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Heaven (@asweetlust)
/ January 31, 2013A lovely ode to peace ~ This reads like a mantra:
I beseech thee, O My Beloved Loving One
Surround me in completeness to know peace
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Bodhirose
/ January 31, 2013Thanks so much, Grace…I found this very soothing to write.
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Samuel Peralta / Semaphore
/ January 31, 2013It’s amazing how the ghazal form lends itself well to pieces invoking spirituality… the “peace” refrain becoming its own mantra, emphasized with every repetition until ultimately becoming one with the poet in the final verse, a virtual, poetic nirvana.
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Bodhirose
/ February 1, 2013The topic of spirituality had to come through in this form for me…it was so fitting. Thank you, Samuel, for adding more knowledge to me on this form. When I had read about it before, it did not go into the depth that you did…I appreciated that. And thank you too for the lovely comment.
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marousia
/ January 31, 2013Nicely done!
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Bodhirose
/ February 1, 2013Thanks for that, Marousia.
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Linda Kruschke
/ February 1, 2013This is beautiful! Peace, Linda (by the way, I always sign comments this way, but it seems to fit here so perfectly)
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Bodhirose
/ February 1, 2013Thanks for the kind compliment, Linda…and I like your very appropriate sign-off! 😉
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kkkkaty
/ February 1, 2013Well done…the peace and spirituality theme is a lovingly carried out here 😉
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Bodhirose
/ February 1, 2013I liked using that theme for this form…thank you, kkkkaty.
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Jamie Dedes
/ February 1, 2013Sweet! Lovely! … peaceful. Very Buddhist. 🙂
Thank you.
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Bodhirose
/ February 1, 2013Ah, thank you, Jamie…I think you’re right. And, you’re welcome. :~)
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hobgoblin2011
/ February 1, 2013very nicely done. So many excellent couplets here, love them all. Thanks.
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Bodhirose
/ February 1, 2013What a generous compliment…thank you so much.
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aprille
/ February 1, 2013More a rosary than your ordinary string of beads. Lovely take on the form.
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Bodhirose
/ February 2, 2013I myself have used a mala for chanting mantras…very similar to a rosary. Thank you, Aprille.
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Sabio Lantz
/ February 1, 2013May Amida alight alright with more meta in your day! 🙂
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Bodhirose
/ February 1, 2013Well, I love that! Thanks, Sabio!
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Sabio Lantz
/ February 2, 2013I am most glad! I am glad you enjoyed the “history” in my poem. I enjoyed re-reading myself. Your mantric mala above filled many readers with peace.
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Bodhirose
/ February 2, 2013It’s satisfying to know that it brought peace to others…I like that.
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wolfsrosebud
/ February 1, 2013so liked the honey-amber richness… and peace a wonderful topic
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Bodhirose
/ February 1, 2013Thank you, Patricia, I’m glad you liked it and I so enjoyed your most reverent offering.
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Tony
/ February 1, 2013This is beautifully written. Just reading it brought a sense of peace to me.
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Bodhirose
/ February 1, 2013So very glad that it did…thank you, Tony.
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Blue Flute
/ February 1, 2013Beautiful and spiritual!
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Bodhirose
/ February 1, 2013Many thanks, Blue Flute.
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ND Mitchell
/ February 1, 2013Loved the way that peace becomes like a mantra that grows in power throughout this powerful ghazal 🙂
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Bodhirose
/ February 1, 2013I hadn’t realized when writing it that it mimics a mantra. But I’ve chanted many a mantra in my day and perhaps it’s coming through in my writing. Thanks for the lovely compliment…I appreciate it.
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vbholmes
/ February 1, 2013“Elevated calm permeates my soul
When bathed in happiness by your peace”
Lovely.
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Bodhirose
/ February 1, 2013Thank you for your appreciation.
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lucychili
/ February 2, 2013today i saw a grapevine entwining a rose. beautiful poem.
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Bodhirose
/ February 2, 2013Beautiful… Thank you very much.
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Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade)
/ February 2, 2013I agree that this one does become like a mantra as one goes on.
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Bodhirose
/ February 2, 2013I guess it does in its repetitive nature. Thank you, Rosemary.
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zongrik
/ February 10, 2013when we are in love, we want it to stay that way, but….
prima donna cat fight
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Bodhirose
/ February 10, 2013Yes, we do. But I came to the realization long ago that love between two people is often fleeting. Thanks.
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Renee Espriu
/ February 15, 2013Hi Gayle, Just dropped by to see how you are doing. Better I hope and with good test results as well? Take care.
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Bodhirose
/ February 17, 2013Hi Renee. Yes, good test results…nothing bad showed up in those biopsies. So grateful and relieved. Had to have naps every day for a while but I’m feeling good. Thanks for checking in with me. xoxo
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Renee Espriu
/ February 17, 2013So good to hear. Look forward to you being able to write again. Give that baby a hug from me.
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Jamie Dedes
/ February 19, 2013I see you aren’t posting as much as you used to. Time with your granddaughter, I would assume. Lovely. Enjoy! 🙂
Many blessing, Gayle, and hope all is well with you and yours.
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Bodhirose
/ February 20, 2013Took your advice… But thanks for your caring…I appreciate it, Jamie. Will look into that book too…thanks for the suggestion.
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Jamie Dedes
/ February 20, 2013Hope it helps. It really cleared a lot of things up for me.
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Bodhirose
/ February 20, 2013I’m so glad you had positive results on your health, Jamie. I’ve already felt less bloated after being off gluten for this short period of time.
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bardessdmdenton
/ February 28, 2013Lovely, lovely.
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Bodhirose
/ February 28, 2013Thanks so much, Diane…how are things with you?
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Anna
/ January 28, 2015Beautiful!
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Bodhirose
/ January 28, 2015Thank you, Anna!
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Sherry Blue Sky
/ January 28, 2015A beautiful and serene ghazal!
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Bodhirose
/ January 28, 2015Thank you, Sherry…a previous writing that I just shared to Facebook.
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