Mountain Sijo

I.
O Great Mountain, steadfastly composed; how refined is your presence
You play among the clouds yet your feet are planted firmly
Under moonlight your peaks shadow deep, mysterious visions
 

II.
The condor knows your heights; it too graceful, majestic and proud
Aloft on cold, crisp breezes, a feather gently rides the currents
A snow leopard prowls invisible; blue sheep bleat through the blizzard

Join us at dVerse Poets as Lynn prompts us on mountains for Poetics.

 

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  1. Great Post

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  2. moonskittles

     /  March 29, 2016

    Beautiful and full of description! :)

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  3. thefeatheredsleep

     /  March 29, 2016

    Gorgeous

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  4. This is powerful, Gayle. The mountain and condor are majestic but the snow leopard and blue sheep especially caught my eye. Thanks for participating…you rocked it!

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  5. I really like Part 2. Especially the condor and the snow leopard. I love animals being used in poetry.

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  6. Wonderfully succinct – made me gasp ;)

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  7. Beautiful !

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  8. Just lovely, I can picture the snow leopard and the condor soaring …such freedom.

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  9. Such an evocative write :D

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  10. I love the homage of the first to the mountain, and the second to the creatures who live there~ Having seen the documentary on these creatures, they are indeed majestic and strong animals ~

    Two beautiful sijos Gayle ~

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  11. Aloft on cold, crisp breezes,
    a feather gently rides the currents

    So much serenity and salvation accorded for little animals that mountains are meant to be the safe sanctuary for many creatures! Very true Gayle!

    Hank

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  12. Such breathtaking imagery. I love it!

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  13. Oooh–without using the word, you have created the impression of majesty, awe. Stunning work, Gayle.

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  14. i see the stillness of a Buddha, as movement stirs around him. Lovely hommage to the Mountain.

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  15. I love the way you’ve shared the magical presence of the place and then add to this mystery by sharing those who find it home…really amazing work, Gayle.

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  16. Wonderful images! I love how the mountain is in the clouds and rooted at the same time.

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  17. I like the image of the condor. I think that’s the best way to see the top of a mountain, through his eyes.

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  18. I love the structure and presentation of your poem; they do the majesty of the mountain and your words justice.

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  19. Your poem has made me really see this beautiful view!

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  20. One of my favorite forms executed so well with this subject! Thanks for this, Gayle!

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  21. Glenn Buttkus

     /  March 31, 2016

    I’ve never tried the Sijo; hope it’s used for MTB one day. Your two pieces eclipse their brevity with soaring word smithing; wow.

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    • Samuel Peralta introduced the sijo to us a few years back in MTB, Glenn. That’s when I learned about it. Maybe we could revisit it at some point. And thank you for the compliment!

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