Life and Love; a Rondel

There was a time when I thought you were the one
And then my world parted and another caught my eye.
That’s the way of life and love; we ride it high
Until incompatibility says we’re done.

We fall in love before we’ve begun
We scale mountains holding hands; we are deified.
There was a time when I thought you were the one
And then my world parted and another caught my eye.

All were dreams and lust, our eyes locked, not seeing past fun,
Not paying attention to what was unrealized.
Disappointment rattled, shook us awry,
We started tumbling, unrolling; we came undone.
There was a time when I thought you were the one.

Join me at dVerse Poets where I am the host Thursday at 3PM EST and give instruction on the Rondel.  It should be fun!  http://dversepoets.com/2016/02/11/meeting-the-bar-the-rondel/

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  1. Oh the nostalgia for that young love, the one we believed would last forever, before it became undone and left one standing again rattled and disappointed, our hopes dashed. But oh it was fun, wasn’t it?

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  2. So well it fits the unwinding … the repeated lines work so well into those failures… much like love coming apart. But usually we find other blooms with nectar.

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  3. Funny…it seems this form led both of us to the same theme–young love lost. Very fun form, Gayle. Thanks for challenging us with it.

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  4. Glenn Buttkus

     /  February 11, 2016

    The form was not too bad to master; there was some mention of 8 syllable count per line, or a 14 line length; glad to see you were a 13 line person with assorted syllable lines, Yes, young love is more lust than anything, just hormonal harmony.

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  5. This is beautifully poignant and I can quite relate to the feeling.

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  6. Very nicely done, it does flow like life, in and out of love.

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  7. This is a great reminder that those lost loves were lost for a reason. Very nice rondel. Peace, Linda

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  8. such an emotion packed Rondel.
    thanks for introducing the form and helping us stretch our poetic muscles

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  9. This works really well. Logical use of repeating lines and excellent rhymes.

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  10. Sometimes those kind of loves don’t last ~ I really enjoyed the refraining line Gayle ~ A challenge with this form, smiles ~

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  11. Something we can all relate to and the feelings surrounding the event of loss and not understanding at first..then coming to terms with it ;) Nice one.

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  12. Ah this reminds me of my youth in the 80’s. Well expressed

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  13. This is beautifully done, ah the first touches of love when we thought that was the one.. Thanks for hosting…

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  14. If it did not materialize then it is for the better as it is a learning process.One gets all the more wiser at the end of the day. Great lines Gayle!

    Hank

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  15. yay! I’m so glad I could finally get through to read you. Having glitches with wordpress tonight.

    Ah, yes. Reality. I remember it well, like a Mack truck. ;) Great piece, Gayle! Thanks for the awesome form prompt!

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  16. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade)

     /  February 12, 2016

    Oh dear, yes, it happens! Nicely written. :)

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  17. the theme of lost first love beautifully conveyed and the refraining lines did the wonder…

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  18. Love when we’re young is powerful but so often not lasting. Lovely!

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  19. Beautifully crafted and full of emotion.

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  20. “We started tumbling, unrolling; we came undone.” Love this line. Young love….takes a while till we arrive at stability :)

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  21. Nicely told. I think to many relationships go no deeper than fun and infatuation. A lot of work goes into love that goes deeper.

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  22. Life is that way….. Nostalgic and beautifully penned.

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  23. Your words are accurate: That’s the way of life and love!

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  24. SMiLes.. Love iN uS
    Love iN thEm..
    Love iN uS
    survives
    when
    real..
    iN i AM Love..:)

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