Rules are Headstrong; an Ovillejo

It’s tied up tight, encircled in a ball
I said tight, not sprawl
Meters are variable from line to line
Unwinding isn’t fine
Starting, stopping, short, long
Rules are headstrong
You’ll soon find they all belong
Keep them straight, don’t let them meander
You’re in charge, now make it grander
I said tight, not sprawl; unwinding isn’t fine: Rules are headstrong!

Join us at dVerse with De as she instructs us on the Ovillejo form: http://dversepoets.com/2016/01/14/unraveling-the-ovillejo-a-new-poetic-form-rolls-up-to-the-bar/

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  1. Ha! I LOVE this perfectly tongue-in-cheek poem about the form! Fantastic! You nailed it!

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    • So relieved it passed your critique, De. It was challenging but also a lot of fun too. Thanks for sharing it. And I really enjoyed reading everyone’s offering.

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  2. Sometimes to be amended or broken. Nice writing.

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  3. Ha. Exactly right with this form for sure. LOVE it.

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    • I wasn’t coming up with a subject very easily until this idea popped in my head. It worked, so glad it did. :) Thank you.

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  4. Ha.. yes I agree… sometime those rules are unyielding… it’s like making skeins of razor wire

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  5. These rules are tough alright ~ They make me awkward when we want to write something else ~ Love the tongue in cheek write :-)

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    • I felt very awkward too, Grace. It just didn’t seem to be flowing but somehow I managed to get into it and it worked. You did a great job; I would never know that it felt awkward to you.

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  6. Good advice for those who write poetry. Smiles.

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  7. I m floored!! :D nice job!

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  8. Your post reflects the confusion I felt about this form which you clearly and beautifully mastered!

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  9. Such fun to read. I really enjoyed yours.

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  10. This is a wonderful ode to the Ovillejo! I love it. Peace, Linda

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  11. This pretty much encompasses the form perfectly. It’s a cool challenge, but somewhat frustrating when it feels like the ends keep slipping away like stitches dropping from knitting needles.

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    • You describe that awkward feeling very well, Carol. I thought it was cool too and I think we all did a good job with it. It turned out to be a lot of fun to read them all.

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  12. I know the rules, but I just can’t help but unwind them just a little. Your poem is a good lesson on today’s prompt!

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  13. This cracked me up!

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  14. Very clever! The Ovillejo explained with an Ovillejo :-)

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  15. aha…done so cleverly…made me smile :)

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  16. I said tight, not sprawl; unwinding
    isn’t fine: Rules are headstrong!

    Rules are supreme in many tight situations. Otherwise things may get out of hand. It is then difficult to right things back. Very true in many instances, Gayle!

    Hank

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  17. Thoroughly enjoyed this poem, I could feel the writer trying to be true to the form and it made me chuckle.

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  18. I folloWed all the rUles
    in school from grades
    1 through 18 then
    all the regulations
    of work from years
    1 through 31.. to now..
    and then i stoppEd
    and devilived..
    but only
    after
    recovery
    from livevil rules..:)

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  19. “It’s tied up tight, encircled in a ball” how true. To make the ovillejo work, it has to be tight. Nice to have the rules presented to form.

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  20. Anonymous

     /  January 18, 2016

    Love this one too. Is it the one you said you wrote in the form it describes?

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