A Quiet Om

tears sigh as they swell and spill
down my cheeks and a tuneless
melody tinged with gray becomes
a vapor around my head
 
the fog intensifies the dirge
and the heavy notes hang
in mid-air, too grief stricken
to float any higher
 
in an instant the plot changes
and with the relief of tears
my mood slowly creates
hues no longer subdued
 
color ricochets around the
room in a dance of joy,
happiness is pink and
sounds like tinkling bells
 
calm now, my concentration
on the movie I’m watching,
colors continue to come
forth; indigo hums my peace
 
and as the story closes
on a happier note so do
the different visual shades;
a quiet om circulates

Victoria invites us to write on the different manifestations of Synesthesia (which has over 60 forms) at dVerse Poets:  http://dversepoets.com/2015/12/03/yum-that-poem-tastes-like-a-fine-cabernet-dverse-mtb-synesthesia/

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  1. I like how the colour changes and dances after “hues no longer subdued”. The fourth stanza made me visualise the dance of colours and bells, and made me smile.

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  2. I can relate to that mood in the early part of the poem and the sensory images you chose work so well. And a wise move to seek out colors to heal the darkness of the moment.

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  3. I love the turn from gray to calm ending Gayle ~ And this part specially:

    color ricochets around the
    room in a dance of joy,
    happiness is pink and
    sounds like tinkling bells

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  4. You used colors with artistry, Gayle. Especially like the idea of indigo humming peace….and the ending with the ‘om’ gives me the feeling of peacefulness & that life is as it should be.

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  5. Glenn Buttkus

     /  December 3, 2015

    Terrific use of the form, as the piece shifts like a classical movement, like a Pollock canvas, like a minstrel’s meditation. Like Mary, I like the lines /colors continue to come/forth–indigo hums my peace/. Om, indeed.

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  6. I like how you focus on the color… and the imagery of them ricocheting to fructify the dirge with joy is really well done.. Then indigo is such a great name and feeling of a color..

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  7. I m a bit overwhelmed with the emotion in this exquisite piece 🙂

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  8. Movies.. often
    sources of incredible
    human nuanced
    emotions.. music
    alone can never
    match
    the fuller
    human
    art in theater
    of life to me..
    but sure it can
    be a roller coster
    difficult
    to stay
    on but
    hard
    to get off
    as well with
    heart engaged..:)

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  9. Such an emotional piece. I think of the time of day known as the blue hour. from ooooo to om – finding peace in peaceful and strengthening colors, the meditations of colors – really beautiful.

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    • Thank you, Toni. There probably are meditations on color. Colors definitely can effect our moods.

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      • Year ago, I lived in a commune of homeopathatic, chiropractic, Bach flower remedies – practitioners along with aromatherapy and iridology – things that were considered “quack” back then but mainstream now. I seem to remember sessions on colors.

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        • I lived in a commune years ago too and we practiced all of the above plus acupuncture, yoga and meditation. Oh, and we were all vegetarians! This was the early 70s and like you said, none of that stuff was mainstream. Took the world a while to catch up with us didn’t it, Toni?! :~)

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  10. A very nice piece of writing
    Gayle and wonderfully written
    too my beautiful friend 🙂

    Andro xxx

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  11. I like how your tears release the peace in such beautiful colors.

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  12. How cleverly you have worked the mood change.

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  13. “in an instant the plot changes” … Man. Isn’t *that* the truth?!

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  14. I like this as a train of thought…following you each step of the way toward calmness; well done with textures and colors 🙂

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  15. ” happiness is pink and sounds like tinkling bells ” — that’s magical!

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  16. I love “Indigo hums my peace.” Beautiful poem, Gayle.

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  17. Interesting how a movie can colour our moods…I’m with Sherry…”Indigo hums my peace” is an absolutely stunning line!

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