I Nodded Off

I nodded off while reading
I nodded off while reading
The words they started a dream
The words they started a dream
A dream the words they started
While reading, I nodded off

The story became a mystery
The story became a mystery
Sleuthing I went to discover
Sleuthing I went to discover
I went to discover the story
Sleuthing became a mystery

Was nothing like Nancy Drew
Was nothing like Nancy Drew
No answers were uncovered
No answers were uncovered
Nothing like Nancy Drew was
Uncovered…no answers were

I went sleuthing a mystery story,
became a dream while reading.
The words they started…
nothing like Nancy Drew was.
Uncovered were no answers;
I nodded off to discover.

Brian Miller is hosting at dVerse today and invites us to try a new form…yes, Brian! See below for the rules of the Paradelle. http://dversepoets.com/2014/07/31/meetingthebar-formforall-paradelles-i-have-obviously-lost-my-mind/

The paradelle is a 4-stanza poem, where each stanza consists of 6 lines.
For the first 3 stanzas, the 1st and 2nd lines should be the same; the 3rd and 4th lines should also be the same; and the 5th and 6th lines should be composed of all the words from the 1st and 3rd lines and only the words from the 1st and 3rd lines. The final stanza should be composed of all the words in the 5th and 6th lines of the first three stanzas and only the words from the 5th and 6th lines of the first three stanzas.

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  1. ha. i am glad you tried it…you pulled it off…and it even made sense…smiles…i used to read hardy boys growing up..but i know some nancy drew…and hey, nodding off you figured it out…i need a good sleep at times to figure out my mysteries….smiles.

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    • Thanks, Brian, I read some of those Hardy Boys books as well but especially loved that girl sleuth, Nancy Drew. The form was actually fun and I went with short lines…thought it would be easier on my psyche…ha!

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  2. I like it! smiles…..I nod off after almost every page these days! I enjoyed your paradelle.

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    • Thanks, Sherry! I have my moments of nodding off while reading for sure. Hope your spinning has finally come to a stop.

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  3. Nicely done, Gayle! 🙂 And the subject matter so appeals. Such a spirit of fun and play here.

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    • Hi Jamie! I don’t know how Nancy Drew came to my mind after all of these years (loved those books!) but she helped me with this challenging form that Brian cooked up for us. And thank you! :~)

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  4. Nancy Drew. I must confess, I never read her mysteries. But I sure like your poem. You did a great job with the form

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  5. I’m sure that nodding off is the best way to be the Nancy Drew.. Well worked form

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  6. a delightful read written in the true spirit of Paradelle…

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  7. When I was a kid, I was fascinated by these child sleuths. Your paradelle sent me right back. And yes, they always solved the mysteries! If only …

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    • I was too, Gabriella. I’m surprised that the memory of reading those books came back to me to help with this form. Yes, if only…

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  8. I loved what you did with this! Actually I could picture the scenario. I remember nodding off while reading, and in my mind the story moved on….smiles. You managed to tell a complete story in your paradelle, and (what’s more) it made sense! Good work.

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    • Thanks for your generous compliment, Mary. Yours was the first one I read and it was just beautiful…you managed it perfectly!

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  9. Glenn Buttkus

     /  August 2, 2014

    Hardy Boys for me as a kid; them and the Adventures of Tin Tin, not to be confused with Rin Tin Tin; You did have fun with the faux form, & it became infectious. You ain’t afraid of no paradelle! Your last line was killer /I nodded off to discover/. Don’t we all?

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    • I never read the Adventures of Tin Tin but I’m sure I would have loved them as a kid. If I remember correctly there was a movie made about Tin Tin not too many years ago. No, I’m not afraid of no paradelle and neither are you…loved your journey into the darkness of camping.

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  10. oh, this is perfect. I love the idea of falling asleep and the words from the page coming to life in your dreams…. I’m sorry you were not as successful as Nancy Drew, but I doubt she could have weaved such a lovely paradelle.

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    • You are too kind, rmp…thanks so much. I went easy on myself with short lines. It did seem to flow pretty easily…thank goodness! :~)

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  11. Excellent poem, you explored the form so very well.

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  12. Interesting for sure and you definitely met the challenge.

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  13. What a brilliant way to interpret such complicated rules, Gayle ~ that’s exactly how it is, when you fall asleep reading. Well done! 🙂

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    • Hi Jacqueline…how nice to see you and thank you for the nice compliment. Yes, your mind starts to get dreamy doesn’t it, no telling where it will take us…haha! :~)

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  14. Wow! You attempted a Paradelle Gayle and its a fabulous one! That’s two Ive read in two days; I may just have to try one! Id never heard of it before. The other I read was by Polly Robinson, called Paradelle in Prague, I don’t know if you follow her, shes a very good poet, and worth checking out. Im hopeless at putting links in especially from my iPad but if you google her you will find her. .
    Love and hugs xxx

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    • You could read a whole lot more paradelles if you go to the poetics group that Polly and I are participants in together. If you look on my sidebar, you’ll see a link to dVerse Poets, our group that gives us all kinds of interesting prompts and information on writing, poets, and much more. You might like to join us sometime, Christine, if you haven’t already. It’s a group of wonderfully supportive and generous poets. And thank you, Christine…it was an interesting form. Love and hugs…

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  15. Thanks very much Gayle, I will check it out! Xx

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  16. This is ace, Gayle, I really enjoyed it 🙂

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    • Thanks, Polly! I’ve just myself gotten back with dVerse and doing a little posting. Was pretty dry there for awhile…my attention was pulling me elsewhere. Nice to have you visit! 🙂

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  17. Fascinating structure to this piece. You always amaze me, Gayle!

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    • My first reaction to the rules of this form was…what?! But I actually enjoyed giving it a try…I shouldn’t have been so hasty in my initial reaction perhaps. Well thank you, Lorna…and sometimes I amaze myself! 🙂

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  18. You captured this challenge with a playful flair. Your always so good at poetry. Loved it … And … The reminder of Nancy Drew. : )

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