Upon the Creek

Upon the creek lies glass, emitting sheen
Unseen through clumped reed grass
But by a bathing Welsh lass
Water, nature, girl, en masse

This is my second Englyn Unodl Union, a Welsh/Celtic form introduced by Susan Judd some time ago for a FormForAll prompt at dVerse Poets…check out the particulars here: http://dversepoets.com/2012/10/11/formforall-englyn/

I’m linking this tonight at dVerse Poets for Open Link Night: http://dversepoets.com/2014/02/25/openlinknight-february-2014/

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by Bodhirose on February 25, 2014 • Permalink

Posted in englyn unodl union, Poetry

Tagged creek, englyn unodl union, girl bathing, nature, smooth surface on creek

Posted by Bodhirose on February 25, 2014

https://bodhirose.wordpress.com/2014/02/25/upon-the-creek/

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Brian Miller
/ February 25, 2014

ha. it paints a scene like a painting
hope though it is nowhere near as cold
as the creek i bathed in once….smiles.

i had forgotten all about that prompt…

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- Bodhirose
  / February 26, 2014
  
  Thanks, Brian…no, this is a lukewarm, bathwater feeling kind of creek…smiles. I’m sure you blocked that rhyming little prompt right out of your mind! Smiles…and a chuckle…
  
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marilyncavicchia
/ February 26, 2014

Interesting form, and it creates quite a picture. Nicely done!

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- Bodhirose
  / February 26, 2014
  
  It is an interesting form…lots of rules for such a short, little thing! And thank you for your kindness…I appreciate it.
  
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becca givens
/ February 26, 2014

New to me form … I like the flow, Gayle!
Going to check it out. Thank you for the link.

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- Bodhirose
  / February 26, 2014
  
  It’s amazing how many forms of poetry there are, Becca…endless it seems. Hey, if you try it let me know…would love to read yours. And thank you!
  
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  - becca givens
    / February 26, 2014
    
    Now that I’ve read the link — hmmmm!! Tricky tricky for such a short form! 😀 It will go on my list “to try” — will let you know!
    
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    - Bodhirose
      / February 26, 2014
      
      Yeah it is tricky…takes some concentration. I figure it’s good for my brain! 🙂
      
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      - becca givens
        / February 26, 2014
        
        Will keep those brain cells motivated!! 😀
        
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Adriana Citlali Ramírez
/ February 26, 2014

I like it, Gayle. I like the rhythm and the repetition of the “s” sound. It makes me think of a sweet spring day.

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- Bodhirose
  / February 26, 2014
  
  I appreciate that, Adriana…thank you. It’s a fun form to try.
  
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Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
/ February 26, 2014

I love this Gayle.. though Welsh.. it made me think of Swedish Painter Anders Zorn, who loved to paint nude girls bathing…

http://www.artnet.se/konstnyheter/konstnotiser/nyheter-2/ … sweet..
I have yet to try the Englyn (sometimes I go back and try old forms)

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- Bodhirose
  / February 26, 2014
  
  Thanks, Bjorn. Yes, I’m sure that this Welsh lass is bathing nude too..
  
  If you give this form a try, let me know…would love to read yours.
  
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- Bodhirose
  / February 26, 2014
  
  Oh, and thanks for the link…very pretty painting of that girl bathing.
  
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Mary
/ February 26, 2014

Your poem paints a beautiful scene, Gayle! Enjoyed the last line especially.

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- Bodhirose
  / February 26, 2014
  
  Thank you, Mary…glad you like it.
  
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Jamie Dedes
/ February 26, 2014

Exquisite, Gayle. The last line is enchanting.
New form for me. Interesting.

Here’s the link to Victoria’s prompt:
http://intothebardo.wordpress.com/2014/02/26/common-senses-writers-wednesday/

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- Bodhirose
  / February 27, 2014
  
  Thank you, Jamie. It’s a tricky little form…lots of rules and regulations. 🙂
  
  And thank you for the link…it was helpful.
  
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