Loyalty

Once consumed by love’s façade,
I spiraled low and hit the ground.

Was here before when love was new
but this time loyalty took too much.

It whittled me into a contorted shape,
barely recognizable with a severed heart.

What I thought was true, found was a ruse
…used against, not for benefit.

Oh foolish girl, you believed again
in someone else instead of you.

What pushed aside and hid so deep
your own well being and sense of meaning?

It wasn’t strengthened to take forefront,
not yet developed to ward off peril.

It’s okay, I’m here and stronger, we’ll heal
the wounds that love did hazard.

I’ll comfort you and shore you up,
hold you close and tell your worth.

We won’t allow another time
that undermines our soul to shine.

Hallelujah!

Mary invites us to be inspired by Leonard Cohen, his poetry and music over at dVerse Poets today.  I always get goosebumps everytime I hear his song “Hallelujah”…so his words helped create mine.  http://dversepoets.com/2013/02/16/poetics-leonard-cohen-and-place/

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  1. Cohen’s “Hallelujah” does that to me too – and your words sent a shiver down my spine, mostly in a good way 🙂

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  2. heart felt gayle….it becomes easy to lose much of yourself in love interactions and finding that balance to where it does not undermine you…harder than you imagine when first drunk on love…you def caught a feel for the song and your own voice as well…

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    • When I was younger, it was much easier for that to happen…hadn’t yet matured into myself really. Yes, so hard to maintain your own self in a relationship where the other may be a more dominant personality. Thanks, Brian.

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  3. Lovely share Gayle ~ I love that musical piece, and indeed He heals ~

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  4. What a wonderful poem, Gayle. It gave me goosebumps. There is something about that song “Hallelujah” that inspires, comforts, and shores up! Your poem definitely captured that!

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    • Thank you, Mary. There’s such a contrast of feelings in that song but the hallelujahs in there do something to me…like they do you.

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  5. Laurie Kolp

     /  February 16, 2013

    So vivid… you pulled me in and made me feel it, too. I especially like:

    It whittled me into a contorted shape,
    barely recognizable with a severed heart.

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  6. This is simply wonderful. Thank you.

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  7. Gayle–I love this. You have shown how easy it is to lose yourself in another, but then find that self again. Great poem.

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  8. Ah, really nice. Strong and helpful thoughts. So easy to get undermined. k.

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    • That undermining can start out very subtle and before you know it you’ve been swallowed up almost entirely. Does not feel good. Thanks, k.

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  9. Great poem indeed – thank-you.

    Anna :o]

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  10. this song seems to be a real favourite, I think I feel the same about the song, it makes me think of working through heartache, to find the true part of myself.

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    • Yes, it does…seems to have a visceral affect on so many. I interpret in that way too…working through a relationship challenge.

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  11. it is a jagged song, and love is a challenging ride

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  12. there’s a small life in giving ourselves to someone, melting into the other without losing ourselves completely.. a felt write

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    • Yes, the line can fade between you and them…and it’s ok if it works in a balanced way but otherwise…when one wants to wield their power…well… Thank you, Claudia.

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  13. Gayle what a heart-felt poem drawn from experience. Sending you a Hug from the UK much love my friend. Love Sue

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  14. Beautifully done. Suggestive of so much of Cohen

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  15. ‘Oh foolish girl, you believed again
    in someone else instead of you.’

    I love those lines and this piece, Gayle. I have to catch up your posts and will do soon (seems like I’m always saying that). Blessings, Diane XO

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    • Always so nice to see you, Diane…and I am saying the same thing. I am so behind with my visits. Can’t really explain why since I’ve moved, the momentum and organization of visiting others has collapsed! My apologies to you too…

      Hugs,
      Gayle

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  16. Cohen is indeed inspired and inspiring and this is a worthy nod to him. Enjoyed, Gayle.

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    • I so love his song “Hallelujah”…not so much sung by him though…have heard better renditions. But there’s no discounting his talent. Thanks, Jamie.

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  17. Love that song and I really liked your poem. Here’s to finding our own inner strength! 🙂 xo

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