Heart Broken

CRACK! and I’m hit
without warning
on the side of my head
and the barb
enters my deaf
ear.  It ricochets
around deep
inside my head
and jiggles
the adrenaline
mechanism.
 
A surge hits
my heart and
it flips, twirls
and somersaults,
the mitral valve
spitting and
sputtering
…leaky.
 
My throat tightens
to keep my voice
silent…to hold
back the tears.
 
The heart
continues its
wild dance and I
wonder, is this
going to be
“THE ONE?”
Finally with
the rhythm unable
to right itself,
I’m taken out,
just like that.
  
Heart broken

Victoria C. Slotto is inspiring us today to write a descriptive poem that packs a wallop at dVerse Poets:  http://dversepoets.com/2013/01/10/the-medium-is-the-message-dverse-meeting-the-bar/

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  1. ouch…a broken heart can be fatal…and refinding rhythm so hard in the after as well…very vivid picture of it for sure….nice intensity…

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  2. At first I thought it was a bolt of lightning…but, yeah, I guess it was. And that’s a bit what that feeling is like, especially if unexpected, sudden. Thanks, Gayle….

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  3. that packs a wallop!

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  4. This packs a wallop for sure. I hope this is not autobiographical. It certainly describes heartbreak – as well as a concussion!

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    • I was looking to write a good wallop…so glad I accomplished that. Yes, it was autobiographical because I sure have had my share of heartbreak in my life. Who can’t relate to being blindsided with heartache. Right? Also, threw in there my problem with heart palpitations that plague me…sometimes I wonder…could this be IT.

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  5. Laurie Kolp

     /  January 10, 2013

    WOW!

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  6. Powerful imagery.

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    • Thanks, SG. Hey, I hope you see this because when I clicked on your link to read your offering…I couldn’t find anything…well, just the word “Refuge.” I tried a couple of times yesterday. I’ll try again today.

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      • ..i have experienced the same.. all i thought i was alone in this…when i tried to go in her link too…couldn’t see anything but only the poem title aside from the blog title…ni contents showes up…did come back several times but same thing happened… 😦

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  7. Creative approach to the familiar theme – broken hearted ~ The sounds of the wild dance makes it come alive for me ~

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    • I was meaning this on an emotional level and physical as I suffer from a heart rhythm problem. Sometimes wonder if it won’t go back into rhythm…and there I’ll go. Thanks so much, Grace

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  8. Sometimes feeling take awhile to sink in but ultimately not always a bad thing. Breathe and get through them. Wonderfully written piece filled with emotions.

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    • I responded to you yesterday, Renee, but apparently it didn’t “stay.” I agree, sometimes the feelings (even though heartwrenching) can give us an opportunity to grow and bring about change. Breathing does help calm and soothe. Thanks for your insight.

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  9. OMG — indeed!! Very nicely done!!

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  10. Powerful and compelling ~ nice write Gayle.

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  11. You’ve nailed it. That feeling of breaking, that sound, that zap-cold. Most uncomfortable!

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  12. This was a flashback for me. Good stuff!

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  13. Yes Crack! just like that in a second…. it hits and can bring one to one’s knees, Excellent Gayle.. xox Sue

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  14. Very intense. I like it!

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  15. this one had me on the edge of my seat – great images! They work well.

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  16. …I felt that! Great write 😉

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  17. …aww…i feel it the way you describe it…i must say, though not exactly, i’ve been there… ah, couldn’t remember how many times…at times i blame myself for wanting the wrong one…hihi… smiles…

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    • Sometimes even our loved ones can kick us in the heart, Kelvin…it doesn’t necessarily mean you chose the wrong one. I’m glad you could relate to this…thanks. 🙂

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  18. Gayle Ma’am,
    It wears one out if it happens that suddenly. One or two may take it that hard and decide ‘no more loving antics for me’ As long as one is in control at the end that is important! Nicely!

    Hank

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    • That’s right…some would shy away after a couple of hard hits…can’t really blame them can you? It hurts! Yes, being in control at the end helps a great deal. Thanks for your thoughts, Hank.

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  19. This certainly did pack a wallop! Well done …

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  20. Jason L. Guichard, MD, PhD

     /  July 6, 2013

    I have been reading through some of the blogs on WordPress and noticed that you have mitral valve prolapse (MVP) and mitral regurgitation (MR, a “leaky valve”), a remarkable post. There is a group of cardiologists on WordPress putting together a heart blog to inform and educate people about the current cardiovascular issues facing many patients today. We have been fortunate enough to get a well-published and international expert on MVP and MR to contribute a series of posts for the blog. We are reaching out to folks and hope that the blog will help you and any others that may have questions or concerns about their health. Thank you for your time and please let us know if we can answer any of your questions,
    Jason

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  21. Hi Jason, yes, I do have MVP and would be interested in learning more especially from an international expert. I was part of a support group at Florida Hospital in Orlando for awhile after I was initially diagnosed. So many questions were answered for me. I appreciate you reaching out to me and inviting me to your blog. I will check it out.

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  22. Jason, can you leave me a link to your blog? Thanks.

    Gayle

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  23. Jason L. Guichard, MD, PhD

     /  July 8, 2013

    Ms. Gayle,
    Thank you very much for your interest and kind words! Here is the link to the blog:
    http://myheartnet.wordpress.com/

    Under the “Mitral Valve Prolapse” tab you will see all the entries that Mustafa I. Ahmed, MD has posted regarding just about everything you need to know about MVP – with more to come:
    http://myheartnet.wordpress.com/category/mitral-valve-prolapse-2/

    You can leave a question under the “Leave a Reply” section at the bottom of any of the posts and he will get back to you. We also answer questions anonymously (for the person asking the question) on Twitter. Just let us know if there is anything else we can help you with. Thanks!
    Jason

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  24. Thank you, Jason, that was very helpful. I’ve already read all the articles on MVP and look forward to learning more. It’s exciting to see the evolution of education beyond the errors of misdiagnoses and the retracting and then the reissuing of new guidelines as doctors learn more.

    Gayle

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