“Life of Pi”–Erasure Poetry

I could see the sea…
and down the road a long ways
 
I suddenly felt I was in heaven.
The feeling, a mix of pulsing energy
and profound peace
 
The road, the sea, the trees,
the air, the sun all spoke
one language of unity
 
All was kith and kin.
 
One other time
out alone on a walk
after a night of snowfall,
coming up to the house,
I turned my head.
 
There was a wood
and in that wood,
a small clearing.
 
A breeze had shaken a branch
fine snow was falling,
glittering in the sunlight
 
In that sun-splashed clearing,
I saw the Virgin Mary.
 
She was smiling at me with loving kindness.

Anna Montgomergy introduces us to Erasure Poetry over at dVerse Poets; Meeting the Bar:  http://dversepoets.com/2012/11/29/meeting-the-bar-erasure-poetry/

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  1. Hmmm, didn’t know that book had a Catholic spin. “I saw the Virgin Mary.”

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    • I’m just getting started on this book. It’s about a Hindu boy who wants to be a Christian and Muslim as well. Don’t know what else happens beyond that at this point.

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  2. dang this is thick with mystical feel….almost a dream, or somewhere between it and reality….really you have put together and enchanting piece…well played…

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  3. I’m reading that book now… still at beginning but can’t wait. This is mystifying…

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  4. You are in for a real treat throughout the development of the book. I really enjoyed what you did with this, you achieve a sparkling clarity and poetic sensibility. Thanks so much for joining us today.

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    • I can’t wait. I passed on going to see the movie with friends because I wanted to finish the book first. And thank you for your generous comment, Anna..I appreciate that. It was a great challenge.

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  5. Eloquent and beautiful. You managed something splendidly poetic!

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  6. nice…you take us by the hand with the images you paint and erased and make us see what happens..nice

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  7. This is dreamy :) (And thanks for saying what the source was.)

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  8. Very beautiful…fantastic feeling….

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  9. I like your poem. Just from seeing clips of the movie, I like what you’ve written. I wish there was a universal religion… but there is one really…it’s called… love.

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    • I share your wish, Bren…and know that it is love too. Or, like the Dalai Lama says, “My religion is kindness.” I love that…

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  10. I can’t praise this enough–absolutely beautiful, and makes me want to read the book!

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    • Well, I’m so very glad you liked this so much, Nico…high praise…I’m very grateful. I would recommend the book…even though haven’t finished it yet.

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  11. Love “All was kith and kin.” You captured some important parts of the book here. I read the book a while ago, but saw the movie two days ago. You ‘erased’ well!

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    • I love that phrase too..very sweet. Thank you, Mary…still working on the book. Pi is now floating on the Pacific with his animal “companions”…gulp.

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  12. This is one of my all-time favorite contemporary novels and I just love how you’ve worked it. Wonderful. Makes me want to read it a third time.

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    • I’ve had books like this one too, Victoria…that make you want to re-read them. I love it so far..I know there’s something very important to come.

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  13. I loved this novel and am excited to see the film. Your erasure poem gives a pretty good sense of the powerful and life-altering questions and emotions tackled in the book.

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    • It seems that this part I “erased” is an integral part to the feel of the entire story. I’m glad I zeroed in on that portion…it was very powerful to me when I read it.

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  14. Wow! I haven’t read the book or seen the movie, but your poem makes me want to! I have a poem in mind for the challenge of an erasure poem, but the time passed and it’s too late to enter it now. I haven’t written mine, but maybe I still will anyway – it looks like yours turned out amazingly! It’s a very tightly written piece and I love the flow and imagery in it. This will sound silly, maybe, but it’s very “you”, Gayle. :)

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    • Well thank you for the lovely compliments, Corina…I like that it’s very “me”. It’s a unique story and very powerful. I’ve now finished the book. If you read it, let me know what you think. xo

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  15. A lovely job of it, Gayle. A sweet lyric sensibility results. I like it. Bravo!

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    • Thanks, Jamie. An unusual story to say the least. I’m glad you liked what I came up with. That erasure poetry is an interesting exercise.

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