These Rhyming Lines–Than Bauk

these rhyming lines
consume time…sigh
confines my mind
into find-ings
a grind, a pain
but oh, gains made
my brain…succeeds

Gay Resier Cannon introduces us to Raivenne who explains the form of Than Bauk to us at dVerse Poets FormForAll:  http://dversepoets.com/2012/11/08/formforall-than-bauk/  Thanks and appreciation to you both…

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  1. hahaha so witty! really clever, love it!

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  2. ha when done, these forms are fun
    but in the midst, makes me want to spit

    lol

    fun play with the form…success is def nice to feel in the after…on this one especially…

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  3. Haha, love where you went with the prompt. I definitely had the urge to bite things before, during, and after. Well played!

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  4. Very clever. I like that you used the challenge as the poem and succeeded brilliantly. Loved it.

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  5. Reflective of the demands of this form, well done. Certainly makes the brain stop and puzzle over the perfect words for the perfect fit.

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  6. I can just feel the ‘whew’ in your poem. I felt exactly the same when I finished writing mine.

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  7. You have put in perfect words what most of us were feeling, I think. Succeeds!

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  8. Chaty Lorens

     /  November 8, 2012

    That was great. I tried what you just did very well. Fun and wit. I’m back to the drawing room.

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  9. Right on, just can help yourself. We , just have to rhyme sometimes.

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  10. Nice! 🙂 I think most times the effort is worth it!

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  11. “but oh, gains made
    my brain…succeeds”

    So know how that feels! Especially with a form such as the Than Bauk. Excellently done.

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    • I appreciate your high praise, Raivenne…and thanks for bringing a new short form to my attention… I really did enjoy giving this a try.

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  12. smiles..oh they are time consuming and can be quite the challenge..but then…so cool when we rose to the challenge as well…you did well

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  13. nicely dealt with 🙂

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  14. Clever! 😉 … Now I will have to check out this new-to-me form.

    Bravo …

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  15. nice, a very fun process oriented poem. Very nicely done.

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  16. Great! I have so much yet to learn in this new poetry world!

    Hope youve settled into your new role. Soun ds from your last poem tnat you are enjoying time with tour new granddaughter.

    Christi d

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    • You and me both, Christine…there seems to be an endless number of forms…I’ve just scratched the surface.

      Had my time with her this morning in fact…three days a week. She is just the sweetest little thing…went on another nice long walk this morning…the weather was perfect.

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  17. Agree. I found it difficult as well.

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  18. Like it — like it a lot.

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  19. that is a fun piece–expressing your struggle with the form while employing it. nicely done!

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  20. Very cute — a poem about a poem. I call that “Meta-poetry”
    Nicely done — made me smile tonight!

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  21. As it has been said above, I also love your “poem within a poem”.

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  22. Very nice! You pulled off the form well.

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