Summer’s Day

Heat builds throughout the morn
becoming a sunlit breeze
weaving the willow branches
 
Clouds connect
deepening their gray
blown out over the gulf
 
Hours pass altering the day
shadows darken
beneath the mulberry tree
 
Humidity dampens the afternoon
mockingbird sings the blues
accentuating the heat index
 
Sticky stillness
begs for respite
from summer’s captivity
 
Evening dawns
a contented sigh
it too born of the day

Photo:  Google Images; Mockingbird

Gay Reiser Cannon explains the triversen form and what constitutes modern poetry over at dVerse Poets for today’s FormForAll:  http://dversepoets.com/2012/06/14/formforall-triversen-an-attempt-to-define-the-modern/

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  1. I like it. I could feel the wet heat, and hear the birds. If I’d been in the backyard, I’d have felt like I was there!

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  2. Your triversen definitely has a subtle haiku-like feel running through it, but with a thoroughly modern voice, interlaced with a wonderfully naturalistic theme.

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  3. Definitely a peaceful day… love it!

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  4. ha the mockingbird accentuating the heat index…i like…and true of our weather here as well….love all the nature in this…and a nice breeze is not a bad thing to cut the heat…

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  5. Ah, are you in Texas too!? It turned hot in the metroplex today after enjoying a surreally cool June week here..thanks to rather violent storms in the area.

    I agree with Sam – you really got to the minimalist feel that inspired that crowd of poets..it felt modern but with Japanese simplicity, with elegance of image. There is a sultry atmosphere that surrounds the piece in meter, rhythm, and in image. Extremely successful, I think.

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    • No, I’m in Orlando, Florida…it’ll be hot and steamy like this well into October, maybe November. We are getting some fierce afternoon thunderstorms though that really help to cool things off.

      I really enjoyed trying my hand at this form, Gay, and appreciate you sharing it with us. I’ve always admired the minimalist styles…saying more through less. Thank you, Gay.

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  6. This is a wonderful manifestation of the form. Each stanza is a sentence. You nailed it, with accents and as Gay said, simplicity.

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  7. well done. Been mild here in Georgia so far, but August she is a comin’

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    • Thanks, Mark. We’ve already had temps into the mid to high 90s..I sure hope it doesn’t get any worse here..

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  8. hedgewitch

     /  June 15, 2012

    Real feel for the natural cycle here, the various players and the mood of summer.

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  9. The closing stanza especially lovely here. k.

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  10. I actually don’t mind the heat as summer here is so short ~ But nice coolness at the end ~

    Enjoyed the visit ~

    http://a-sweetlust.blogspot.ca/2012/06/to-young-lady.html

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    • We pretty much skip over spring and head straight into our summers that can last well into what fall should be..winters are usually very mild and comfortable. Thanks for coming by.

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  11. Of course I love this…mockingbirds are among my favorite sources of inspiration. When I was a teenage (many moons ago) I was in my cousins wedding in Lake Worth, FL. These was back when there were no hairdryers. It was so humid that my hair wouldn’t dry and I had to use the heater in the motel to dry my hair. I’m sure you can relate.

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  12. I totally can relate, Victoria. We had no air conditioning growing up here and my hair being ravaged by the humidity was the bane of my teenage existence! If I ever got it nice and smooth..it was very short-lived…in no time at all it would spring out from my head in frizzy curlicues!

    I love those beautifully singing birds too…their songs are amazing.

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  13. oh a mocking bird singing the blues that’s lovely…I have a few more months til summer mind you it can heat up incredibly toward the end of winter and spring. Very lovely poem!

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  14. Another nice job with a new form … such a poetic adventurer! 😉

    It’s going to be a heck of a summer, eh. Already hot by you. We a few scorchers, but we’re back to moderate weather for a moment.

    Stay cool … if you can!

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    • Ha..thanks, Jamie. I don’t mind giving other forms a try now and then…but still don’t have a complete understanding of pentameter, feet..etc., etc.

      Now we have a tropical storm swirling around off of our west coastline..Debby. It will continue to bring bands of rain and wind apparently throughout the rest of the week. It’s been very wet for days now…and of course, humid. Basically..summer in Central Florida!

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  15. So lovely, Gayle, touching all the senses! I have read it over and over again!

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    • Another new form to me…it seems like they’re endless. I’m so pleased that you enjoyed it, Diane…thank you!

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  16. “Sticky stillness
    begs for respite
    from summer’s captivity” <—this. Due to living in TN, I can honestly say that I hate Summer. 😦 Ugh, the heat and humidity bring out the worst in me (and others, too!). I feel your pain, lol. Loved the line about mockingbird blues – we have them here, too, although to me they seem to love this kind of climate – crazy birds! Anyway, well done piece, Gayle.

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    • The extreme heat here does become too much and it goes on for so dang long! I have to live indoors..it doesn’t agree with me either. I’m sure those birds don’t mind the heat..their songs seem just as cheerful as ever really. Glad you liked my slice of summer, Corina…thanks.

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  17. You just can’t get away from that central Florida heat. It’s why I moved to the coast – trade winds …. but … hurricanes and tropical storms are a bigger contendor than heat and humidity.
    The Ying and Yang of it all.
    Nice post …
    Hugs,
    Izzy

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    • Yes, it is a bit cooler over on the coast with the breezes..basically I just stay indoors. The tropical storm helped keep our temps a bit lower this past week..but now they’re soaring again.

      Thanks, Izzy! Hugs for you..

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  18. this feels like a haiku

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