It’s Over

In those early, giddy
days, our relationship
was exciting, colorful
and sparkling,
to say the least. But
it felt inevitable to me
that it would end. 

It seems when a
relationship starts
off with such deep
infatuation and
feelings of fancy
that it simply doesn’t
last through the
long haul. 

The hints and
suggestions were
apparent to me
that things were
cooling off and
I’ve never been one
to hang on when
it’s over.  I’m very
practical in that way.

I could see the
droop in your
demeanor–you
seemed to be
wilting under pressure
right before my eyes.
And I must admit,
I didn’t have the
same feelings for
you after awhile either.

It’s time to say our
goodbyes.  No hard
feelings, okay?
It was a joy while it
lasted and I will
always remember
you with pleasure
and the fondest of
memories…

Honey!  Can you
take the Christmas
tree out to the curb
this afternoon?!

Write2Day–Endings;  http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2011/12/28/write2day-endings/#comments

The Poetry Palace; Thursday’s Poet’s Rally Week # 59:  http://promisingpoetsparkinglot.blogspot.com

Blessings pouring forth
The Perfect Poet’s Award
A happy surprise

I nominate:  Half Way Between The Gutter

http://halfwaybetweenthegutter.wordpress.com/

http://promisingpoetsparkinglot.blogspot.com/2012/01/perfect-poet-award-week.html

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  1. At least you didn’t ask Christmas tree to take Honey to the curb.

    Nice play here. I really liked it.

    Tim

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  2. Well, you got me on that one!!! Great ending poem and surprise ending all in one. :0)

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  3. got me too! hehe. Nice twist

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  4. I love it! Whacked us all upside the head with this sneaky lil ditty! Nice one, Rose!

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  5. bittersweet goodbye,

    memories preserved, no hard feelings.

    well said,
    cheers.

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  6. lol, I think you hurt that tree’s feelings lol, it was fun, interesting, thanks for the visit and comment :)

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  7. Very cool twist, indeed! Made me chuckle. How quickly a writer can drive a reader’s feelings…..

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    • This was part of the prompt from Victoria this week…write a surprise ending. An interesting challenge.

      Thanks, Leslie. I’m glad to hear you chuckled!

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  8. Assumptions can be so misleading. :)

    Excellent Gayle. :)

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  9. That was really practical!
    :) nice work with word play!

    Alcina-Breathless

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  10. Very cleverly written – you’re no hard-hearted-Hannah.

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  11. funny how things can turn out… you got me

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  12. You had me fooled! I enjoyed this a lot, very hopeful and positive! I loved the surprise ending.

    Happy New Year!

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  13. cute – funny – humorous – adorable – and – a gotcha, too.
    Nice done, Ms.Gayle … please give us more humor. You have
    a funny tongue in cheeck way about doing it. I liked it very much.
    HAPPY NEW YEAR – 2012
    May all your days be filled with the wonder and the magic that your heart can hold.
    Namaste,
    Izzy xoxoxo

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  14. hehe.. good one!

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  15. the ending line was superb…i was laughing at the end. this is very creative way of packing up those christmas decors ~

    wishing you happy new year ~

    http://a-sweetlust.blogspot.com/2011/12/still.html

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  16. Happy New Year.
    Your relationship with the tree came to an end rather soon. Not even 12th night yet…:)
    I wasn’t expecting the ending !

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    • Happy New Year…I look forward to more sharing with you this coming year.

      Tree is still up…but it’s been up for weeks..will be “over” soon.

      I’m glad that you weren’t expecting that ending…exactly what I was going for!

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  17. Happy New Year 2012,,,, have fun :)

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  18. Got me too. Unexpected.

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  19. when it’s over, you can be reborn

    ornamented joshua

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  20. “droop in your demeanor”–so descriptive. You sure know how to make words work for you!

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  21. This is sad, profound goodbye.

    well done,.
    Happy New Year.

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    • Just saying goodbye to the Christmas tree…I can’t keep it too much longer… I’m glad you liked it too.

      Happy New Year, Snowflakes!

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  22. Wow, I totally didn’t expect that one! :) It was thought-provoking, too, though. The metaphor is a clever one…of course I didn’t realize that the relationship was about the tree until the end, but it could very much apply to a relationship with a person, too! It also made me think of how people in relationships take so much for granted, sometimes, and how with the right ‘care’ and ‘attention’, the tree could stay healthy and beautiful for many years to come! Excellent write, Gayle.

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    • It was for a prompt to write a surprise ending…and this is what popped into my head. Saying goodbye to the “sparkling” relationship with my Christmas tree! And you’re right, it very well could apply to people too.

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  23. The ending was unexpected. Nice :)

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  24. What a surprising twist! I was completely thinking of a people relationship until the end that is. Guess we shouldn’t be so narrow-minded, huh?
    So practical for a people relationship but I haven’t gotten tired of my Christmas tree yet! It’s still sparkling for me. Great poem, I enjoyed reading it.

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    • So glad you were surprised…that was my intention. :) Thank you for the lovely comment.

      No, I haven’t really tired of mine yet either…it’s still up and shining. I’m still enjoying the lights and sparkling too.

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  25. Wonderful ending … for which I was grateful …;) Happy New Year to you!

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    • Haha..yes, just my Christmas tree..but actually it’s still up– I don’t want to part with it yet even though needles are dropping all over the carpet. :)

      Happy New Year!

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  26. Especially the last verse I like. Nice poem.

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  27. Androgoth

     /  January 6, 2012

    Yes a very nice twist at the end there Gayle
    and how wickedly written too, well of that I am
    never surprised as your talents for the written
    word are truly limitless :)

    Have a lovely weekend Gayle :)

    Androgoth XXx

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