Down, Dark, Deep

Down, dark, deep

below earth’s light,

live creatures unseen

by our innocent eyes.

They’re inhuman,

obscene and incredibly

shrewd to the ways

of cruelty and anguished pain.

Their eyes squint with

an otherworldly gleam,

flashing with a thrill

to hurt and maim.

Lips curled in merciless

glee, they intone mantras

of depravity.  From chasms

beneath, they wander alone,

banished from existence forevermore.

In limbo they’re sentenced,

no victims they claim;

the hell that they know

is wholly their blame.

Many thanks to the Thursday Poet’s Rally for this honorable award.

To be a Perfect Poet is quite an honor I see;

I appreciate the acknowledgement

And the love bestowed on me.

I nominate Renee Espriu
http://reneejustturtleflight.wordpress.com/

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  1. oooo…getting ready for All Hallow’s are we? 😉 lol j/k

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  2. Murky … shadowy … gloomy … so very creepy. It is fab …!!!!
    I love the line “they intone mantras of depravity” … outstanding.
    Spooky …!!!!
    Happy Hallow’s … to come
    Izzy

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  3. Very eerie, indeed. The idea of limbo has always frightened me; the being trapped there forever. Well written, Gayle.

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  4. a haunting poem. very well written, you portrayed the scene in front of eyes.

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  5. Love this line: “Lips curled in merciless

    glee, they intone mantras

    of depravity.”

    I can think of a few people like that.

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  6. Androgoth

     /  September 30, 2011

    How dark and incredibly wicked of you 🙂
    In other words I really like this one Gayle
    indeed it is a wondrously offered piece of
    ghoulish poetry from the darker recesses
    where fiends of all descriptions lurk…

    Have a delightfully
    wicked weekend Gayle 🙂

    Androgoth Xx

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  7. I must admit, I’ve been feeling a bit dark lately–perhaps in preparation for Halloween’s arrival. I don’t usually “do” wicked though. I’m glad you enjoyed this–thanks so much, Androgoth. 🙂

    Gayle

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    • Androgoth

       /  October 1, 2011

      Halloween or not it is all the same for me, and I certainly do like your darker attempts on poetry, and remember darker is not always dark if you know what I mean? 🙂

      Have a very nice rest of day and a superb weekend 🙂

      Androgoth Xx

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  8. Tleigh

     /  October 1, 2011

    Could this be a description of ones own most deep and dark subconscious, too hideous to share, we must keep this dark place a secret, hidden from all? Love the poem Gayle!

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    • T Leigh! You came by–how cool. Yes, absolutely you could interpret this in that way. We must bring out this hideous side into the light though–go get your high-beam flashlight! I’ll hold you if you start screaming…hehe!

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  9. Darkly done … another shadow side poem. Gayle, you get better all the time. I had to read this over, so much in it. Thank you!

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    • Yes, a dark mood struck me suddenly–gotta let it out! I’m happy to hear I’m getting better–thank you for that, Jamie.

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  10. Good one!

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  11. Oh creepy, made me want to turn a light on, maybe in my soul!

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  12. all hallows eve is coming… i can feel it through this poem… nicely done well penned poem! please check my entry too: “A Sudden Rush”

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    check my collection of poems @ “A Murder of Poems”

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    • Yes, somehow I got into the spirit of the darkness early this year. Thanks so much for your kind comment, Julian. I’ll check your posting out.

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  13. Oh i love the dark imagery – Hallowe’en is coming and I am so excited! This is wonderful, thanks for sharing!

    Heres mine: http://cursemymetalbody.wordpress.com/2011/10/06/poetry-thursday-68/

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  14. Dark, and imagery used to portray something more than ghouls. I like that I can read more into this poem.
    Rosie

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    • Yes, there is more that you could read into this–however you wish, is fine with me.

      Thank you for coming by and sharing your thoughts with me, Rosie.

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  15. powerful story on creatures or animals living under the earth.

    Thanks for sharing.

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  16. Incredibly dark… I like it!

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  17. Here’s to hoping none of us never meet these goblins you speak of 🙂
    Enjoyed reading. Very good.

    Check out my entry: http://wp.me/p1LMFk-ck

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  18. strong writing, well done.
    bless those and hope life is better for all.

    😉

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  19. Intense poem. i pray that all souls attain the Light of Truth one day. Thanks for sharing

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  20. Gayle is in Halloween mood.. Creeepy! Don’t wanna go thad deep down alive! 🙂

    Leo @ I Rhyme Without Reason

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  21. I agree a certain sense of darkness seems to pervade the change of seasons at this time of year. This is perfect for the mood.

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  22. its that time of the year for the dark to overshadow
    And the nights draw in.. … Loved your spooky poem.. It will not be long before the be-witching Night.. 🙂

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    • Yes, it seems to have shown up early for me this year. I’m letting it flow!

      Thank you, Sue Dreamwalker, for your visit. 🙂

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  23. Whoah!!! Simply awesome!
    It sent shivers down my spine..
    Are they lurking all around?

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