Doomed from the Start

Were we doomed from the start?

Women were to be feared and thus

conquered and held under strict control.

After all, it was we who thoughtlessly

went against God’s commandment

not to eat from The Tree of Knowledge.

We’re responsible for the downfall of mankind–

opening the gateway to sin and hell.

All from that simple first act of giving

into temptation, we set our destiny.

Is this the reason for man’s dominion

over us–we needing their guidance?

Has the world’s karma been

carried on the backs of sinful women

since that fateful day in the garden?


When will we have finished paying off

this debt so the world can once again

abide in a state of love and innocence?

But wait, doesn’t our partner in

crime have to do some time?

Your turn!

My entry for Poetry Picnic Week 1 from The Gooseberry Garden–Adam and Eve

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  1. You make a great point,lol! Good write!


  2. Ah, Original Sin. If this isn’t proof that the Bible was written by men, I don’t know what is. Women used to be worshiped for the mystical power of giving birth. Christianity put an end to that and put women in their place–under the rule of men. (I used to teach Women’s Studies, so I could go on and on about this.)

    Suffice it to say that your poem is spot-on and perfectly executed. Great work!


    • Yeah, some really funky things have gone down in history to swing the vote in someone else’s favor. I could go on and on too…

      Thanks for coming by, Lorna–I appreciate your compliment and sharing your thoughts.


  3. doomed from the start?

    true, very powerful take on the prompt.



  4. Fitting the theme at poetry picnic perfect! Enjoyed reading it Gayle!


  5. Could be a reason… Yet, I suspect it’s an excuse. Well said!


  6. I read this yesterday. I guess I forgot to leave a comment.
    WOW …. you covered alot here. This could be an evening of discussion.
    It sure fit the challenge.
    Izzy xoxox


    • Well sometimes I have controversial thoughts that I feel like I must share. For sure it could make for some interesting discussion.

      Thank you, Izzy.


  7. I like this poem, Gayle. I think about this topic from time to time. I think I must have something of Eve in me as knowledge still outweighs the lack of it , for me. If knowledge is evil, it makes me sad.


  8. creative take on the theme.

    have a lovely day.


  9. Thank you, Morning–I appreciate your visit.


  10. I always thought Adam got off too easy! He could’ve said “No” also!


  11. “History is written by the winners.” Never more true than the meetings at Nicea, where the “final” version of the Bible was approved (throwing out the Gospel of Mary Magdalene, also of Thomas – who spoke of Mary M. being the first real teacher of the disciples after Jesus’ death). Men in skirts deciding that we have cramps because we are all to blame? Excuse me? At least Eve talked it over with the Trickster. Adam just said, “Sure, gimme a bite” and didn’t think twice. So much for biblical literalism. Pastor’s wife here, and our Bible studies ROCK! ha ha, Amy


    • There’s a lot of controversy surrounding the Bible–who wrote it–were certain references removed to better keep control over people and their beliefs, etc.

      Is poor “Adam” just an innocent victim in this whole thing? Did Eve hold him down and shove that apple down his throat? I think not…

      Rock on, Amy! xoxo


  12. Yes, Genesis blames male violence on female “temptation”…that’s the basic mindset of an abuser…blame the victim…


  13. for how long will women believe in those control methods? everyone knows who ate the apple in reality 🙂

    women for very rational reasons are timid, a tendency they should throw away.


    • We women here in the U.S. seem to be making solid strides. It’s been a long time coming. Now we are offering support to our sister-friends from around the world to have their freedom.



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