Mysterious Cries

Mysterious cries were heard throughout the mist

Disembodied voices arose within my mind

A shudder went through me–I thought I felt a kiss


Climbing the bluffs, sensing something amiss

A chilling, cold shiver crept up my trembling spine

Mysterious cries were heard throughout the mist


Daylight was waning, clouds were cirrus wisps

Twilight nearer, horizon no longer refined

A shudder went through me–I thought I felt a kiss


Prevailing shadows mock my measured steps

Hindering hills obstacles of my time

Mysterious cries were heard throughout the mist


Losing my footing, I slip and ankles twist

Strong arms felt around me prevent my incline

A shudder went through me–I thought I felt a kiss


Glimpsing  ethereal vapor disappearing in my midst

My smile was offered to this unearthly divine

Mysterious cries were heard throughout the mist

A shudder went through me–I thought I felt a kiss


Advertisements
Previous Post
Next Post
Leave a comment

29 Comments

  1. dreamy imagery, what a thrill.

    Like

    Reply
  2. Love the use of imagery… very powerfully paints a masterpiece.

    Like

    Reply
  3. jgavinallan

     /  July 11, 2011

    Gayle, the imagery and prose…oh yes. This could be a scene from a novel.
    Your choice of words to paint the scene…wow!
    Hugs…Jaye…very jealous
    xoxo

    Like

    Reply
    • It gave me a “Wuthering Heights” kind of feeling.

      Sure do appreciate your lovely compliments, Jaye. Thank you.

      Hugs… xoxo

      Like

      Reply
  4. way to go,

    perfect one.

    Like

    Reply
  5. well it sure is a terrific villanelle. you captured the scene perfectly. left me wondering what will be coming out of the mist, out came a sweet companion 🙂

    Like

    Reply
  6. Nice Villanelle!

    Like

    Reply
  7. Thank you, Michael.

    Hugs…

    Like

    Reply
  8. Very nice — I like it.

    Like

    Reply
  9. reads like a romantic dreamy novel scene… just a little better though 🙂

    Like

    Reply
  10. Mysterious and deep with words that leave one wondering…Is there or is it something else?!? Love the flow and the other worldly feel.

    Like

    Reply
  11. Well done and the repitition works and helps reinforce the strange sense. Good!

    Like

    Reply
  12. I love the line – “mysterious cries could be heard throughout the mist” …
    sounds so misty. No really that sends a chill – a little.

    Beautiful ..
    Izzy

    Like

    Reply
  13. This is really well done. The repetition of
    I thought I felt a kiss
    builds tension and a colder and colder chill each time it is repeated. This is excellent, excellent work.

    Like

    Reply
    • Thank you very much. This was my attempt at a Villanelle…so much of it is repetition. I’m glad it had that “chilly” affect on you–that’s what I was hoping for!

      Like

      Reply

Please share your thoughts...

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

Wightrabbit

Words and Pictures from The Isle of Wight

writing in north norfolk

Writer of children's literature, short stories and poetry

Lady Nyo's Weblog

A woman writer's blog with invitations to other writers

Poetry Breakfast

Beginning March 20th, 2016 Poetry Breakfast will once again serve a little poetic nourishment every morning. Start your day with our new expanded menu. Poems, of course, are our specialty. But we will also be serving a fuller menu that includes poetry related creative non-fiction such as letters to and from poets, essays on poetry, and anything else that might feed a poet and poetry lover’s soul.

Mithai Mumblezz

Thinks and again mumbles!!

findingtimetowrite

Thinking, writing, thinking about writing...

mindlovemisery

"We're all out there, somewhere, waiting to happen."

NavasolaNature

Nature needs Nurture

Whimsygizmo's Blog

poetic ponderings...parenting...procrastination...

Tao of Scrumble

A freeform way of life, love and everything

Sharp Little Pencil

Amy Barlow Liberatore... stories of lost years, wild times, mental variety, faith, and lots of jazz

silentlyheardonce

A Silent poet shouting to be heard

generaliregi

Romance of Five Clouds and Magical Poetry

kanzen sakura

South meets East: Poetry and Musings - words of the seasons

Poems, stories, paintings and more by Sharmishtha Basu

(Agnijaat, Agnishatdal, Agnijashatadalama, Indie Adda)

This, that and the other thing

Looking at life through writing and photography

jaywalking the moon

poetry by claudia schoenfeld

She's Writing

Poetry and Prose

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields-Addicted to Purple

Growing older is inevitable. Growing up is optional.

everyday amazing

spreading good cheer, fun & love for life

Michael's Lair

Just Write WordPress.com site

Björn Rudbergs writings

Poetry and fiction by a physicist from the dark side

The WordPress.com Blog

The latest news on WordPress.com and the WordPress community.

THE BeZINE

Be inspired...Be creative...Be peace...Be

bardessdmdenton - author- artist

Historical and Literary Fiction / Essays / Poetry / Reviews /Book Cover and Interior Illustrations / Pet Portraits and Other Commissioned Artwork ... "Life can't ever really defeat a writer who is in love with writing, for life itself is a writer's lover until death - fascinating, cruel, lavish, warm, cold, treacherous, constant." ~ Edna Ferber, 1885-1968, American novelist, short story writer and playwright

Soul Dipper

Spirit Builder by Design

Contemplative Moorings

The official blog of unofficial author Michael Marsters.

Ramblings From A Mum

This is my journey, my thoughts, my views, plain and simple and from my heart. Please travel with me and share, hopefully it will be an interesting trip.

bwthoughts

copyright 2013 - no reuse without permission ( see bwfiction.wordpress.com for fiction and fantasy )

"On Dragonfly Wings with Buttercup Tea"

All Is One With Our Creator

MyHeartBlog

Take Control of Your Health

The Daily Post

The Art and Craft of Blogging

Wanjiku

poetic inspiration from life's simplicity

k8edid

Mumblings of a Middle Aged Madwoman

IN MY NEXT LIFE

if I go around more than once then ...

I Rhyme Without Reason

I live in words

Soul Speak

'You may say I'm a Dreamer, but I'm not the only one' ~ John Lennon

~ Dragon's Dreams ~

Carpe Noctem Quod Tempus Fugit!

Dreamwalker's Sanctuary

A Sanctuary for Enlightenment and Peace through Poetry and Inspirational Thoughts as we go through Life

Lafemmeroar

laughing at the malfunction of the universe is better than crying about it

Lorna's Voice

Finding ways to make words sparkle

Olivia's In- Mind Whirls..

"It's all in my mind"

dVerse

Poets Pub

Leslie White

View artwork by Leslie White

jgavinallan

The best time to love...is when it is impossible///Stories of the heart-broken/shattered and sometimes mended

%d bloggers like this: