I
ink well night
cool glow splits in two
shadows peaking peek
II
thinking thoughts are fraught
with danger
ought not too much thought
III
moon light follows
over my shoulder, shadowing close
watching, guiding, comforting
IV
orchid swinging low
tempts the bee
offers her nectar
Samuel Peralta instructs us on the La Lune form at dVerse Poets Form-For-All: http://dversepoets.com/2013/01/03/la-lune/
Laurie Kolp
/ January 3, 2013These are great. I especially like the second and fourth one.
Bodhirose
/ January 3, 2013Thank you, Laurie.
brian miller
/ January 3, 2013haha…love the ought and thought one…its twisty…gotta watch those tempting flowers too…smiles…yours are magic…love them…
Bodhirose
/ January 3, 2013Thanks, Brian. I really enjoyed your backyard narration too.
Tony
/ January 3, 2013Nice use of both lune forms.
Bodhirose
/ January 3, 2013Thank you, Tony…had to try them both.
Heaven (@asweetlust)
/ January 3, 2013Lovely set…I specially like the third and fourth ones ~ Well done Gayle ~
Bodhirose
/ January 3, 2013Thank you for that, Grace.
jasmine calyx
/ January 3, 2013I love two and four.
Bodhirose
/ January 3, 2013So glad that you do…thanks, Jasmine.
ManicDdaily
/ January 3, 2013Very charming all. k.
Bodhirose
/ January 3, 2013Thank you, Karin.
Mary
/ January 3, 2013A wonderful set of lunes!
Bodhirose
/ January 3, 2013Thank you, Mary…they were fun to do weren’t they.
SilverGardenia
/ January 3, 2013Very lovely. I especially like stanza 2!
Bodhirose
/ January 3, 2013I’m glad you like it especially…thank you, SilverGardenia.
Renee Espriu
/ January 3, 2013A beautiful piece.
Bodhirose
/ January 3, 2013Yet another form, Renee! They never end… :)
Sabio Lantz
/ January 3, 2013Really nice. Loved the orchard one esp.
Bodhirose
/ January 3, 2013Well thank you, Sabio.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore
/ January 3, 2013A well-crafted pair of Kelly lunes and of Collom lunes – showing exactly how well they help focus the image, thought, theme. I especially like lune IV, with its images of nature that evoke classical haiku. Well done.
marousia
/ January 3, 2013Nice! I love the first
claudia
/ January 4, 2013hmm nice…i esp. loved the orchid swinging low
tempting the bee..
kkkkaty
/ January 4, 2013like your ink well night…..cool lunes…;)
Kim Nelson
/ January 4, 2013REALLY like your last one… that orchid is visible in my mind’s eye.
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/01/04/la-lune/
Miriam E.
/ January 4, 2013very sweet, loved the last one! beautiful work
ds
/ January 4, 2013like the “ink well night” and particularly the final one about the orchid. Just beautiful. Thank you.
Gretchen Leary
/ January 4, 2013The first is my favorite. In fact, there is something amazing how the word order you used in the very first line. Nicely done!
Gretchen Leary
/ January 4, 2013Gotta love my phone and its quirks – I meant that I love the word order. Not sure how the word “how” ended up in there
Kelvin S.M.
/ January 4, 2013…you first lune’s depicts a companion at night… always stalking…i love the notion behind having the moon’s light over my shoulder… quite intimate… and your last gives a fine surrender… wonderful offering…smiles…
Mama Zen
/ January 4, 2013Oh, that last one! Breathtaking.
Jamie Dedes
/ January 7, 2013That’s a fine piece Sam put together. Meanwhile, you’ve done well within the guidelines. I like them all, but I love number three. So partial to moonlight.