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A bird I spied up in the oak,
Shadows therein did give him cloak.
Trilling whistles did he engage,
O joy! Freedom from gilded cage.
I thrilled to watch you through my scope.
Your charming antics brought me hope.
Petulant warble as if onstage,
O joy! Freedom from gilded cage.
Bib, crown and nape of rufous hue,
With wings of deepest, dusky blue.
Who are you…little spirit sage?
O joy! Freedom from gilded cage.
I actually taught myself this form some time ago and this is what I came up with. I’m still taking the “easy” way (rather than meter) and used eight syllables for each line.
Gay Reiser Cannon guides us in the Kyrielle form today over at dVerse Poets for FormForAll: http://dversepoets.com/2012/12/20/formforall/
Gay Reiser Cannon
/ December 20, 2012Very apt and quite lovely. I think this is a fine kyrielle expressing the true joy of freedom. Surely his is a song of thanksgiving.
Bodhirose
/ December 20, 2012Thank you, Gay. I think it is a song of thanksgiving.
Androgoth
/ December 20, 2012Your writing never fails to please
no matter what theme or style my
great friend :) I do hope that you
are ready for Christmastime and
I know for sure that you will be :)
Have a really enjoyable Christmas
gayle and of course I wish you and
all of your family a Happy New Year
in 2013 :) Be very well Gayle :)
Andro xxx
Bodhirose
/ December 20, 2012What a nice surprise to see you here, Andro. And what a kind compliment you always have for me. I so appreciate that! I’m waiting for a few things to come through the mail. I’m one of those who like to shop online. ;) I was assured I would have my items arrive by Christmas…so they had better hurry up!
I hope your Christmas is a wonderful one, Andro…and may the New Year bring you and your loved ones much joy, peace, good health and prosperity.
Love and hugs,
Gayle
Androgoth
/ December 20, 2012Thank you for your kind thoughts my sweet friend, and don’t worry about the online goods I am sure that they will arrive on time :) I find the experience of online shopping rather exciting and there are some real bargains to be had also that adds to the thrill :)
Have a deliciously fine Friday Gayle :) :)
Andro xxx
Bodhirose
/ December 22, 2012Most of my orders came yesterday…woohoo! Waiting on one more. I love online shopping. Can sit at home with my laptop (and in my pajamas) and visit so many places…it’s great. Also, many sites were offering free shipping…that’s the only way to go.
Enjoy your weekend my friend. :)
brian miller
/ December 20, 2012little spirit sage….smiles…on the surface a beautiful capture of the bird free…but then again a nice symbol as well…watch out those gilded cages….smiles….freedom is a beautiful thing when fully realized…
Bodhirose
/ December 20, 2012You’re so right, Brian, a nice symbol too. Life is not fulfilling if kept within a gilded cage.
Grace
/ December 20, 2012I like the refraining lines, so uplifting to read ~
Your last stanza sparkles ~ Have a Happy Holiday ~
Bodhirose
/ December 20, 2012I thought so too, Grace. Thanks so much for all your visits and kind comments through the past year..I truly appreciate your support. Happy Holidays, peace and good will to you and your loved ones, Grace.
Sherry Marr
/ December 20, 2012This is really delightful to read, Gayle. I especially love “little spirit sage”. Intriguing form, and you mastered it so well.
Bodhirose
/ December 20, 2012Thank you, Sherry…a lovely form and not so difficult. I like that part too…they are little spirit sages.
wordcoaster
/ December 22, 2012Yes “little spirit sage” was ingenious, and I think the lack of regular meter actually enhanced the poem (as it freed it from its cage) :)
Bodhirose
/ December 24, 2012Well, that’s encouraging to hear…that the lack of meter actually enhanced my poem. Thanks, Wordcoaster! I suffer from a great fear of those different poetic meters…I just can’t seem to wrap my brain around them. I am committed to tackling them though…some day.
ayala
/ December 20, 2012Wonderful last stanza, beautiful write.
Bodhirose
/ December 22, 2012Thank you, Ayala. :)
Sabio Lantz
/ December 20, 2012It read beautifully.
It was playful, silly and gorgeous all at once. Very nice. Thank you.
Bodhirose
/ December 22, 2012Thanks for your sweet comment, Sabio.
Mary
/ December 20, 2012This is delightful, Gayle…. I can feel your joy as you watch the joyful little bird.
Bodhirose
/ December 22, 2012I do love birdwatching. :)
claudia
/ December 21, 2012smiles…let the little bird fly..good to escape from those gilded cages… a beautiful use of the form bodi
Bodhirose
/ December 22, 2012Yes, they don’t belong in cages…gilded or otherwise. Thanks, Claudia.
Michael (contemplativemoorings)
/ December 21, 2012Let freedom sing…
Bodhirose
/ December 22, 2012Aww, I like that…thanks, Michael.
Tony
/ December 21, 2012The first stanza jarred on me – it’s the word order in the middle two lines that I don’t like. After that, things improved a lot and the final stanza is delightful
Bodhirose
/ December 22, 2012Gosh, sorry that you were jarred, Tony..but glad it didn’t last too long. Thanks.
Aria
/ December 21, 2012Love this one. Brings to mind the poet released through writing. Perfectly done!
Bodhirose
/ December 22, 2012Yes, that’s a nice analogy…I agree. Thanks, Aria.
Mama Zen
/ December 21, 2012This is just delightful!
Bodhirose
/ December 22, 2012Thanks for that, Mama Zen.
Rene
/ December 21, 2012as beautiful as freedom
Bodhirose
/ December 22, 2012How sweet…thank you, Rene.
SilverGardenia
/ December 21, 2012What a wonderful feeling to be free! Beautiful poem.
Bodhirose
/ December 22, 2012I agree, Silver Gardenia and thanks so much.
kaykuala
/ December 21, 2012Beautiful writing Gayle! One often times never treasure the freedom one gets. When related to the gilded cage it becomes apparent how freedom should be treasured. Nicely!
Hank
Bodhirose
/ December 22, 2012Yes, freedom is to be treasured..so empowering. Thank you for a wonderful comment, Hank…I appreciate that. :)
Poet Laundry
/ December 21, 2012I think this is a masterful offering! I can picture him…lovely.
Bodhirose
/ December 22, 2012Thank you, Poet Laundry…I do love watching birds..they are delightful.
bardessdmdenton
/ December 23, 2012Even within form, such freedom in your lyrically chosen words!
Bodhirose
/ December 24, 2012Well, I like that idea…that even within the “confines” of the form, freedom came through. Thanks for the kind comment, Diane.
mobius faith
/ December 24, 2012This is fab!!!!
Bodhirose
/ December 24, 2012Thanks, Terry…I appreciate all those extra exclamation points!
ashbeezone
/ December 24, 2012This is Fabulous Piece of Work from you
Plus, I’m Back .. With my Latest Piece of Work .. Happy Holidays !!
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/2012/12/23/is-it-the-end-of-the-beginning/
Bodhirose
/ December 24, 2012Happy Holidays, Ashish..nice to see you here! Where in the world have you been? I’m coming right over to check out your latest…
Jamie Dedes
/ December 27, 2012Made me smile. I love the idea of “little spirit sage.”
Bodhirose
/ December 29, 2012Thanks, Jamie..I love that too.