Down, dark, deep
below earth’s light,
live creatures unseen
by our innocent eyes.
They’re inhuman,
obscene and incredibly
shrewd to the ways
of cruelty and anguished pain.
Their eyes squint with
an otherworldly gleam,
flashing with a thrill
to hurt and maim.
Lips curled in merciless
glee, they intone mantras
of depravity. From chasms
beneath, they wander alone,
banished from existence forevermore.
In limbo they’re sentenced,
no victims they claim;
the hell that they know
is marked with their names.
Over at Imaginary Garden With Real Toads, Fireblossom, for Fireblossom Friday, invites us to write on devils. This is a re-post with a minor change. http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2012/07/fireblossom-friday-devil-you-say.html
Mama Zen
/ July 20, 2012Excellent flow! I really liked this.
Bodhirose
/ July 21, 2012Thank you, MZ..
flipside records
/ July 20, 2012I like this part best:
“Lips curled in merciless
glee, they intone mantras
of depravity”
Bodhirose
/ July 21, 2012I like that part too..soulless buggers..
Mary
/ July 20, 2012A wonderfully sinister write…..! Good post.
Bodhirose
/ July 21, 2012Thanks, Mary..it was fun to do darkness.
Susan
/ July 21, 2012I love that after you describe their evil so intensely, you assure us that they are already in limbo and dis empowered. “marked by their names” !!
Bodhirose
/ July 21, 2012Yes, they made their own hell…we’re safe!
Sherry Blue Sky
/ July 21, 2012A very spooky write, and I especially like the final stanza. Well done!
Bodhirose
/ July 21, 2012Glad the spookiness came through…thanks, Sherry.
Daydreamertoo
/ July 21, 2012I would hate to have to live that way…yikes. You captured their miserable existence so well.
Bodhirose
/ July 21, 2012I know…in limbo..forever. Many thanks.
Laurie Kolp
/ July 21, 2012Love this, Gayle… especially the last two stanzas.
Bodhirose
/ July 21, 2012Thanks, Laurie..I appreciate that.
brian miller
/ July 21, 2012dang…a rather chilling end on this one….def no thte way i want to live…
Bodhirose
/ July 21, 2012Yeah, a chilling thought..living forever in limbo…
lolamouse
/ July 21, 2012Yikes! Very eerie! I love the rhythm you used in this one!
Bodhirose
/ July 21, 2012It is eerie isn’t it…almost scared myself writing it! :) Thanks, Lolamouse.
coalblack
/ July 21, 2012The wickedness and also a sense of empty isolation is strong in this. Thanks so much for being a part of FBF! Just one note for future reference; a new poem was asked for in the instructions, as is the case with all the challenges at Toads except for open link monday.
Bodhirose
/ July 21, 2012Thank you, Coalblack…I appreciate the great comment. So sorry that I missed the proper instructions for your challenge. Only re-posts on open link Monday…got it. :)
dragonkatet
/ July 22, 2012OOOoooohhh, I like the last stanza the best, too! But it’s all well done. :) You described them so well, I can almost hear them wailing!
Bodhirose
/ July 23, 2012Oh, yes, they’re wailing alright! Thanks very much, Corina..
shanyns
/ July 23, 2012This is otherworldly and really good…
Bodhirose
/ July 24, 2012Thanks so much, Shanyns..I appreciate that.
Jamie Dedes
/ July 26, 2012Pacing is excellent and lends verisimilitude to the piece. One ends up really feeling that promise of hell. Excellent work.
Bodhirose
/ July 26, 2012Thank you, Jamie. Well, the promise of hell to me is that it is of our own making! :(
bardessdmdenton
/ August 1, 2012Dark and deep … powerful.
Bodhirose
/ August 3, 2012I wrote this one last year getting in the Halloween mood…
Androgoth
/ August 17, 2012Yes I remember this one Gayle
and it is really good too :) You have
been etremely busy with your post
and I will need to be calling back at
the weekend to catch up a little :)
In the meantime do have a wonderful evening
and a superb weekend my great friend :) :)
Androgoth XXx
Bodhirose
/ August 18, 2012Hi there…yes, I rather like this one myself. :) Will be happy to see you whenever you can come by, Androgoth…have a fun rest-of-your-weekend. I went out last night…in tonight… Take care… xoxo